Sumi H. Inkblot

I've never read them, but the fact someone told me part of the dialogue went like this -- "Sorry," [character] apologised, has put me off forever. Don't forget: "The young ...

La! Why have these things been dragged up? >.< I feel perpetually nervous about this story...I don't know. I was thinking about PMing a mod to delete the threads, I ...

Update! Sorry I haven't critted yet, I'm turning into a 'tiquing slug and...blah blah blah. Oh, God. His father gave him what ?! And he just reacted with "What?" For ...

Oooh. Very interesting there more to come? I'd enjoy reading about his rounds. :) The biggest problem here is not enough description....description is needed to paint the scene and story. ...

One word: here. Check back with me once you've completed this and given it some thought, won't you? :)

You'd better update before Nick gets back from vacation, or lettuce heads WILL roll! XD You know the system :) He could hear the waves crashing gently against the rock ...

I have arrived. :trumpet fanfare: :P This'll be short, because I have to get off in like ten minutes. (BTW, I'm the person who reads the crits before the story ...

OK, this shows promise, if you polish it up a bit more. A lot of the things are really cliche, like the name "Kwest". It's not a very subtle pun. ...

McMourning's caught the majority of spelling-blah, so now for something completely different. :D 1. While it's understandable that you would put dreams in italics, people only use italics when it's ...

:coughLEOJEANcough: :points up at that significantly, eyebrows raised: This was good, and I couldn't find many errors. ^^ "What's so funny?" I'd asked , sitting next to you. Just stuff ...

Wow....what an interesting thought ^_^ It's much too short for me to give a proper 'tique, so forgive me for being brief. The idea is interesting, as is the straw-thing, ...

O.K., your most obvious flaw here is that you're not using the law of natural punctuation. ^^ The rule of natural punctuation is this: when you're talking to a friend, ...

....erm, this sounds stupid, but what is the point of this poem? **Oh, BTW, Welcome to the YWS!** I fall motionless on summer sands, Packed away in the blue bag ...

Oh, wow. Goosebumps, drowns! I like your style, it's kind of like a snake in the sense that it swings words gently back and forth, back and forth until BAM!- ...

I has arrived :P :trumpet fanfare: OK, you told me your mom proofread this....did she miss all the capitalization errors? 'Cuz they're kinda blatant, but whatever. Strikeouts are what you ...